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Down the Rabbit Hole by =nose-dive:iconnose-dive:

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"You see, it's hard to explain, son...
Do you know about the birds and the bees?"
"What about them, dad?" son asked.
Father crossed his legs with growing unease.

"If you found a rabbit hole, what would you do?"
Son perked up, "Put my hand in and find a bunny!"
He shook his head, "No, no, something could attack you!
Then you'd have to see a doctor and pay to get better"

Son slumped in his chair, "could I poke a stick in there?"
Father paled, "Well, yes, that's how it's done traditionally.
And only when you know other company is rare.
Then, if the conditions are right, you might go inside."

Son shrugged, "But how will I know there's company?"
Father crossed his legs again, "Well, er...
You'll notice upturned earth at the entrance way,
And that means you shouldn't go near, stay away."

"Also, make sure you put on a rain coat before going in,
you never know what bugs, germs, or crustaceans are in there."
Son stared, "Why are we talking so much about bunnies?"
Father leaned forward, "You'll thank me someday."
©2008-2010 =nose-dive
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Author's Comments

Wrote this especially for :iconthe-literati:'s contest.

it's a bit out of my subject range, but I figured... why the hell not!?

Note: BOLD is the Father.
ITALICS are the Son.

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:iconcmj603:
~CMJ603 Jun 22, 2008, 2:49:50 PM
I love this poem! *hugs*

--
Urieligion is my addiction.

Well, I don't really remember, but I remember it being very pleasant. And something about duckies, as well.
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=nose-dive Jun 22, 2008, 6:39:10 PM
:D
I love extended metaphors!
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~Leo-Garth Jun 22, 2008, 9:46:02 PM
This one's great! And he talked about the birds and the bees, and then a rabbit HOLE.

Naughty thoughts. :crazy:

--
"There is no enemy. There is no victory. Only boys who lost their lives in the sand." - Sabaton, Cliffs of Gallipoli
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=nose-dive Jun 22, 2008, 10:26:46 PM
I knew most people would think about cheating based on the "You see, it's hard to explain" prompt, so... I decided this could be a potential standapart strategy :3

Heheheh, I laughed my ass off when I first thought of the father's possible blunders, and twisted metaphors.
:iconcmj603:
~CMJ603 Jun 23, 2008, 3:49:44 AM
Hooray!
:highfive:

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Urieligion is my addiction.

Well, I don't really remember, but I remember it being very pleasant. And something about duckies, as well.
:iconmisanthropyreavealed:
~misanthropyreavealed Jun 23, 2008, 1:15:29 PM
Haha, this is great. I love how everybody dances around this particular subject.

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Oh.
[link]
I've always wanted to be a rocket ship.
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~fense Jun 23, 2008, 4:34:50 PM
Awesome story you told, the poor kid is so lost haha

But I think you pushed the rhymes, I almost wish it was an open poem.

--
Why shun the demons we should meet,
When bitter lives are bittersweet? ©me
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=nose-dive Jun 23, 2008, 5:34:25 PM
:/ Yeah, I was a bit against even keeping the poem because of the sort of forced rhyme.
But I gave in because I didn't want to rewrite a ton of jokes.

Laziness will be the death of me.
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~Oleem Jun 23, 2008, 6:16:53 PM
:lol: I think you have a good chance in the contest. This was really entertaining. The only thing I would suggest is to be more consistent about "the father" vs "father" and to get rid of "father stiffened" in the last stanza.
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